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Postby CignaXI on Sun May 16, 2004 2:14 pm

Well, currently I don't have anyone else to ask for feedback and I have to hand it in tommorow so some feedback from you guys would be great. Here are the link, it is in doc and txt format. Thanks!!!!!!!!!

http://amadeus.uprm.edu/~4036_b4/Cdrlabs-ResearchPaper.doc

http://amadeus.uprm.edu/~4036_b4/Cdrlabs-ResearchPaper.txt
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Postby dodecahedron on Sun May 16, 2004 5:47 pm

need to do some serious proofreading.
some spelling and grammar erros.
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Postby dodecahedron on Sun May 16, 2004 5:59 pm

interesting.

is this a school paper or what?
if so, not bad i would say.
but then, my powers of literary analysis aren't all that great. so don't attach too much importance to my words!

you need to fix/improve some phrases which are improperly worded (IMO of course) and like i said some typos and grammatical erros (incorrectly constructed sentences).

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Postby CignaXI on Mon May 17, 2004 8:33 am

thanks dodecahedron! Since I posted it yesterday I have corrected many grammar errors. English is not my primary language so that's why I have so many errors. At least the essence and meaning of the work are acceptable. Thanks agains dodecahedron for taking of your time and giving me some feedback about it. Although I already handed it today, I have reposted the paper if you are still interested(same links as above). I hope I got all does grammar errors.
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Postby dodecahedron on Mon May 17, 2004 9:21 am

welcome :)

sorry i couldn't help with the contents, but then i haven't read the book! :D

briefly glanced again, at least some of the errors i saw yesterday were gone. so that's good.
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Postby CignaXI on Mon May 17, 2004 12:27 pm

:) :) :) :) :) :) :)
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Postby VEFF on Tue May 18, 2004 2:37 pm

dodecahedron wrote:need to do some serious proofreading.
some spelling and grammar erros.


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Postby dodecahedron on Tue May 18, 2004 8:38 pm

VEFF wrote:
dodecahedron wrote:need to do some serious proofreading.
some spelling and grammar erros.


;)

I have been busy with some things in my personal life, so I haven't been able to post in a while.
This may not have been the best way for me to "come back" so-to-speak.

good one :D
and a grand way to make a come-back! :P

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